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The bar graph shows the percentage of people who eat 5 proportion of fruits and vegetable in UK from 2001 to 2008.

The bar graph shows the percentage of people who eat 5 proportion of fruits and vegetable in UK from 2001 to 2008. xaVWb
Deepa craft illustrate the information information about the fruits and vegetable consumed per day by the crowd of UK between 2001 and 2008. Overall it is evident from the graph that women 8 more fruits and vegetable than children and mens the ratio of females is above 30 where is the ratio of males and children is 27 and 25 orderly. A glance at the graph reveals that that in the first year 2001 nearly about 20% of women consume fruits and vegetable. The graph for the upward Trend and in 2007 the highest ratio of women is above 30 but after this it show a slight decrease in the value of women who consume 5 portions of healthy diet. Where in the percentage of male in first year is 5% less then women but is remain increasinb till 2008. In comparison with both children's consume very less fruit and vegetables the highest value is 25% in 2018 and from there it follow downfall.
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craft illustrate the
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information information
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and
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vegetable
consumed per day by the crowd of UK between 2001 and 2008.
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it is evident from the graph that
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women
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fruits
and
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vegetable
than children and
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mens
the ratio of females is above 30 where is the ratio of males and children is 27 and 25 orderly. A glance at the graph reveals
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that that
in the
first
year 2001
nearly
about 20% of
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women
consume
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fruits
and
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vegetable
. The graph for the upward Trend and in 2007 the highest ratio of
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women
is above 30
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after this it
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show
a slight decrease in the value of
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women
who consume 5 portions of healthy diet. Where in the percentage of male in
first
year is 5% less
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women
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remain
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increasinb
till 2008.
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with both children's consume
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very
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less
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fruit
and
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the highest value is 25% in 2018 and from there it
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downfall.
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