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The bar graph shows the people who go to the chiema hall in 2003 and 2005 and 2007

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The given by information about Individuals who visited the theatre that figure had been recorded in percentage from 2003 to 2007. On weekends, the figure can be noticed notice at a higher point, but on weekdays people were less willing for going movie hall, as well as the first day of a weekday was at least point as compared to others days. In the three given years, the Saturday figure was the highest which was accounted for above 25%, and on Sunday 23% figure had been recorded who went to the theater in 2003 that figure was more than others two given year's ( 20%) Monday figure which stood at almost 7%, while that figure was dropping slightly till 2007 and reached 5%. Two days, Tuesday and Wednesday's, that figures had witnessed at a similar point in the whole period which had a percentage hovered 10%. In 2003, on Thursday, 30% of people who loved going to the cinema hall that figure can be seen more than as opposed to the others years(2003 and 2007) which was only 10%. An equal proportion had been observed on Friday, which was above 15% in 2003, 2005, 2007. The given by information about Individuals who visited the theatre that figure had been recorded in percentage from 2003 to 2007. On weekends, the figure can be noticed notice at a higher point, but on weekdays people were less willing for going movie hall, as well as the first day of a weekday was at least point as compared to others days. In the three given years, the Saturday figure was the highest which was accounted for above 25%, and on Sunday 23% figure had been recorded who went to the theater in 2003 that figure was more than others two given year's ( 20%) Monday figure which stood at almost 7%, while that figure was dropping slightly till 2007 and reached 5%. Two days, Tuesday and Wednesday's, that figures had witnessed at a similar point in the whole period which had a percentage hovered 10%. In 2003, on Thursday, 30% of people who loved going to the cinema hall that figure can be seen more than as opposed to the others years(2003 and 2007) which was only 10%. An equal proportion had been observed on Friday, which was above 15% in 2003, 2005, 2007.
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on weekdays
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were less willing for going movie
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as well
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as compared to others days.

In the three
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was the highest which
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25%, and on Sunday 23%
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figure
had been
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recorded
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who
went to the theater in 2003 that
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figure
was more than others two
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given
year's
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20%)

Monday
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figure
which stood at almost 7%, while that
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figure
was dropping
slightly
till 2007 and reached 5%.

Two days, Tuesday and Wednesday's, that
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figures
had witnessed at a similar
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point
in the whole period which had a
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percentage
hovered 10%.

In 2003, on Thursday, 30% of
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people
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who
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loved
going to the cinema
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hall
that
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figure
can be
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seen
more than as opposed to the others years(2003 and 2007) which was
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only
10%. An equal proportion had
been observed
on Friday, which was
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above
15% in 2003, 2005, 2007. The
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given
by information about Individuals
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
visited the
Possible spelling mistake. 'theatre' is British English.
theatre
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
figure
had been
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recorded
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
from 2003 to 2007.

On weekends, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
figure
can
be noticed
notice at a higher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
point
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
on weekdays
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
were less willing for going movie
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hall
,
as well
as the
first
day of a weekday was at least
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
point
as compared to others days.

In the three
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given
years, the Saturday
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
figure
was the highest which
was accounted
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
above
25%, and on Sunday 23%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
figure
had been
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recorded
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
went to the theater in 2003 that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
figure
was more than others two
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
year's
Don't put a space after the opening parenthesis
(
20%)

Monday
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figure
which stood at almost 7%, while that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
figure
was dropping
slightly
till 2007 and reached 5%.

Two days, Tuesday and Wednesday's, that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
figures
had witnessed at a similar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
point
in the whole period which had a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
hovered 10%.

In 2003, on Thursday, 30% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loved
going to the cinema
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hall
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
figure
can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
more than as opposed to the others years(2003 and 2007) which was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
10%. An equal proportion had
been observed
on Friday, which was
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
above
15% in 2003, 2005, 2007.
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