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The bar graph shows the estimated sales of jeans of two companies within next year in Turkey. Write the summary of the sales describing the information

The bar graph shows the estimated sales of jeans of two companies within next year in Turkey. Write the summary of the sales describing the information 5bnyA
The given cluster bar graph represents the sales for two firms: Mango and Jack and Jones, located in Turkey for the upcoming one year. On the X-axis, months are indicated while on the y -axis is the number of pairs in thousands. From the graph it is predictable that over the months, the volume of sales will climb up, illustrating an upward trend throughout the year for both the companies. It is also observed that more jeans of Mango will be sold, in comparison to those of Jack and Jones for all the months expect July and August where they are lesser than Mango. It can be observed that, the sales of Mango will incline by insignificant volume throughout the year. As in January it is slightly more than in February, March and April conversely it is little higher in May and June. Then after, a sharp rise follows for executive two months: July and August by around 40 % after which sales decline a little in the next months. Similarly for Jack and Jones, initially the sales would be higher in against, to the following six months thereafter. However in the months of July and August the sales will be comparatively lesser than the other company. However it is tremendously rising in the month of December by two folds as of January.
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sales
for two firms: Mango and Jack and Jones, located in Turkey for the upcoming one year. On the X-axis,
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months
are indicated
while on the y -axis is the number of pairs in thousands. From the graph it is predictable that over the
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months
, the volume of
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sales
will climb up, illustrating an upward trend throughout the year for both the
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companies
. It is
also
observed that more jeans of Mango will
be sold
,
in comparison
to those of Jack and Jones for all the
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months
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expect
July and August where they are lesser than Mango. It can
be observed
that, the
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sales
of Mango will incline by insignificant volume throughout the year. As in January it is
slightly
more than in February, March and April
conversely
it is
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little
higher in May and June. Then after, a sharp rise follows for executive two
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months
: July and August by around 40 % after which
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sales
decline a
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little
in the
next
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months
.
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Similarly
for Jack and Jones,
initially
the
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sales
would be higher in against, to the following six
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months
thereafter.
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However
in the
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months
of July and August the
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sales
will be
comparatively
lesser than the other
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company
.
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However
it is
tremendously
rising in the
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month
of December by two folds as of January.
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IELTS academic The bar graph shows the estimated sales of jeans of two companies within next year in Turkey. Write the summary of the sales describing the information

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