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The bar graph shows employed in in one part of Australia in year 2001 and 2008.

The bar graph shows employed in in one part of Australia in year 2001 and 2008. 06213
The rendered bar graph illustrates the information about individuals did jobs in various workplaces in city of Australia between 2001 and 2008. The data is calibrated in numbers. Overall, at the first glance numerical of working people in sales department touched the highest point; whereas, it was collapsed in farming during both years. On scrutinizing the graph it is witnessed that in 2008 the number of employed masses through sales sector were hit the peak around one lakh ninty thousand. while, it was concerned above 1 lakh by computing full, in Australia, accounting department experience minimal fall at 80, 000, according to figure workers decrease sharply showed the count of 70, 000 collectively in nursing and farming sectors in second year. Furthermore, in the initial year masses involved in working were escalated sharply at 1, 80, 000. However, they were plummeted slightly at 1 lakh in computing sector. The individuals those working were 80, 000, nearly 50, 000 and twenty thousand in accounting, nursing and farming sector respectively, in farming they hit the bottom just above 20, 000.
The rendered bar graph illustrates the information about individuals did
jobs
in various workplaces in city of Australia between 2001 and 2008. The data
is calibrated
in numbers.

Overall
, at the
first
glance numerical of working
people
in sales department touched the highest point; whereas, it
was collapsed
in
farming
during both years.

On scrutinizing the graph it
is witnessed
that in 2008 the number of employed masses through sales
sector
were hit
the peak around one lakh
ninty
thousand.
while
, it
was concerned
above 1 lakh by computing full, in Australia, accounting department experience minimal fall at 80, 000, according to figure workers decrease
sharply
showed
the count of 70, 000
collectively
in nursing and
farming
sectors
in second year.

Furthermore
, in the initial year masses involved in working
were escalated
sharply
at 1, 80, 000.
However
, they
were plummeted
slightly
at 1 lakh in computing
sector
. The individuals those working were 80, 000,
nearly
50, 000 and twenty thousand in accounting, nursing and
farming
sector
respectively
, in
farming
they hit the bottom
just
above 20, 000.
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