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The bar graph shows Australia's actual population in 2002 and projected figures for 2101

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The bar graph shows Australia's actual population in 2002 and projected figures for 2101. Overall, the majority of Australia's population between the ages of 15 and 24 will decline by 2101. In contrast, the figures show population between the ages of 55 and 64, is expected to increase by 2101. In 2002, just under 15% of the population was between the ages of 15 and 24, while in 2101 this number is predicted to drop to 10%. 15% of Australia's population aged 25 to 34 in 2002, is estimated to decline to 11% by 2101. Furthermore, the population aged 35-44 will remain at 15% in 2002. is expected to change slightly and drop to 12% by 2101. On the other hand, in 2002 14% of the population was aged between 45-54, while in 2101 this number is projected to drop to twelfth%. In addition, the 55- to 64-year-old population was 10% in 2002, which is projected to increase slightly and reach 12% in 2101.
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Australia's actual
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in 2002 and projected figures for 2101.
Overall
, the majority of Australia's
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between the ages of 15 and 24 will decline by 2101.
In contrast
, the figures
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between the ages of 55 and 64, is
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to increase by 2101.

In 2002,
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under 15% of the
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was between the ages of 15 and 24, while in 2101 this number
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to drop to 10%. 15% of Australia's
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aged 25 to 34 in 2002,
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to decline to 11% by 2101.
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, the
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aged 35-44 will remain at 15% in 2002.
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slightly
and drop to 12% by 2101.
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, in 2002 14% of the
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, the 55- to 64-year-
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was 10% in 2002, which
is projected
to increase
slightly
and reach 12% in 2101.
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IELTS academic The bar graph shows Australia's actual population in 2002 and projected figures for 2101

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