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The two-line graphs illustrate the percentage of trains, from a particular company, that were either cancelled or running late in October and November in 2008.

The two-line graphs illustrate the percentage of trains, from a particular company, that were either cancelled or running late in October and November in 2008. G3bYx
The two-line diagrams delineate the level of trains, from a specific organization, that were either dropped or behind schedule in October and November in 2008. Overall, both two lines changed in the period overviewed. While trains would in general be late in the second seven day stretch of November, the most elevated level of cancelation was found in the initial fourteen of October. First taking a look at figure 1, until the second seven day stretch of November, the railway train organization seemed to receive a decent presentation, when the level of the train running late declined to its most minimal rate at under 10% toward the finish of October. In any case, just inside week 2 of November, this statistic hit its top at more than half, prior to falling somewhat to 40% in week 3. The second figure, the initial fourteen days of October encountered the most elevated level of the train dropping (7%). This figure from there on collided with just 1%, then, at that point, changed consistently. In week 3, November, it came to 4%.
The two-line diagrams delineate the
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, from a specific organization, that were either dropped or behind schedule in October and November in 2008.

Overall
, both two lines
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in the period overviewed. While
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would
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be late in the second
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stretch of November, the most elevated
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cancelation
was found
in the initial fourteen of October.

First
taking a look at figure 1, until the second
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seven day
stretch of November, the railway
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train
organization seemed to receive a decent presentation, when the
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level
of the
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train
running late declined to its most minimal rate at under 10% toward the finish of October. In any case,
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inside week 2 of November, this statistic hit its top at more than half, prior to falling somewhat to 40% in week 3.

The second figure, the initial fourteen days of October encountered the most elevated
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level
of the
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train
dropping (7%). This figure from there on collided with
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just
1%, then, at that point,
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changed
consistently
. In week 3, November, it came to 4%.
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IELTS academic The two-line graphs illustrate the percentage of trains, from a particular company, that were either cancelled or running late in October and November in 2008.

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