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The bar graph show the number of graduated University in Canada from 1996 to 2006.

The bar graph show the number of graduated University in Canada from 1996 to 2006. JLLLa

The bar graph given illustrates the number of both female and males passed in university of Canada between 1992 to 2007. It is clearly seen that, more females than man graduated in the last decade, the number which was around 150, 000 to 96, 0000 in 2006. However, in 1994 their number was similarly increased then gradually decreased. In 1992, the certified female students number was higher than male, which was around 100, 000 to 71, 000. After that, the promoted number girl in 1996, was very similar to boys both increased, this rate then dropped. By the end of the period, this figure was the highest. The highest number of female students was graduated in 2006, which was around 150, 000. On the other hand, male students graduation number was the highest in 2006 which was around 96, 000. In contrast, male students was the least number of graduated than female. Overall, it is clear that in 2006 graduate students number was the highest. Whereas, the figure of female was the highest over the period than male.

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