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illustrates the process of producing chocolate.

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A glance at the given diagram illustrates the process of producing chocolate. Overall, it is obvious that there are ten parts which began from the growing of the cocoa and culminated with the final product being liquid chocolate. First and foremost, from three area South America, Africa and Indonesia, Cocoa was planted and harvested when their pods become ripe to collect white cocoa beans. After being fermented, they were spread in sun until dried to packaged in large sacks. The next step begin when people transported those sacks to factory by train or lorry. In there, they will be roasted at 350°C until crushed in order to remove their outer shell and prepare for pressing. Finally, the inner part of beans goes through a press with two rollers to become liquid chocolate, as a result of this pressing process.
A glance at the
given
diagram illustrates the process of producing chocolate.

Overall
, it is obvious that there are ten parts which began from the growing of the cocoa and culminated with the final product being liquid chocolate.

First
and foremost, from three area South
America
, Africa and Indonesia, Cocoa
was planted
and harvested when their pods become ripe to collect white cocoa beans.

After
being fermented
, they
were spread
in sun until dried to packaged in large sacks. The
next
step
begin
when
people
transported those sacks to factory by train or lorry. In there, they will
be roasted
at
350°C
until crushed in order to remove their outer shell and prepare for pressing.

Finally
, the inner part of beans goes through a press with two rollers to become liquid chocolate,
as a result
of this pressing process.

IELTS academic illustrates the process of producing chocolate.

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
139 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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