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The bar graph illustrates the information about three decentralised sectors which gave contribution to India's groos domestic products in the time period between 1980 and 2020. The data has been calibrated in a percentage.

The bar graph illustrates the information about three decentralised sectors which gave contribution to India's groos domestic products in the time period between 1980 and 2020. The data has been calibrated in a percentage. xOrEy
At a fleeting glance, the striking feature of bar chart is that agriculture gave the highest contribution to India's GDP in the 1980 that was almost 40% whereas industry give 10% contribution which was inclined 5% in 1990 and remain constant in the later given three years. scrutinizing further, in the year of 1919, there was 30% agriculture rose India GDP whilst the percentum of agriculture decline gradually and reached at 15% in 2020. In addition, in 1980, the service contribute almost one ten percent which was increased up to 10% more in the 2000 and 10% percent in 2020. Overall, it is quite evident that industry and service experienced mushrooming trend to gave contribution to India's GDP except agriculture showed declining trend.
At a fleeting glance, the striking feature of bar chart is that
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gave the highest contribution to India's GDP in the 1980 that was almost 40% whereas industry give 10% contribution which
was inclined
5% in 1990 and remain constant in the later
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three years.

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, in the year of 1919, there was 30%
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agriculture
rose India GDP whilst the
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of
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agriculture
decline
gradually
and reached at 15% in 2020.
In addition
, in 1980, the service contribute almost one ten percent which
was increased
up to 10% more in the 2000 and 10% percent in 2020.
Overall
, it is quite evident that industry and service experienced mushrooming trend to gave contribution to India's GDP except
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agriculture
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showed
declining trend.

IELTS academic The bar graph illustrates the information about three decentralised sectors which gave contribution to India's groos domestic products in the time period between 1980 and 2020. The data has been calibrated in a percentage.

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