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The bar graph illustrates the highest and lowest level of two pollutants, that are Sulphur dioxide and Dinitrous Oxide, in four big cities namely Los Angeles,Calcutta, Beijing and Mexico.

The bar graph illustrates the highest and lowest level of two pollutants, that are Sulphur dioxide and Dinitrous Oxide, in four big cities namely Los Angeles, Calcutta, Beijing and Mexico. wnb3E
Language plays an important role to express oneself. Researchers predict that people will communicate in one language in coming years. I think this evolution will help a lot to bring people together from all around the world. First of all, if people will use only one language, it will be easier to communicate with each other. The sharing of ideas and thinking will become easier. In addition to this, development in many fields of life will happen as more people will interact with each other due to ease of communicating. For example, if some kind of problem arises in any industry and people also have a solution to it but they are unable to express themselves though sharing of solution will become easier when everyone will have their hands on one language. The next advantage is that science and technology will experience advancement. Moreover, the tourist, businessman and students will feel more comfortable to travel around the globe and study. For example, with the use of one language people will more rapidly grab the knowledge. The understanding level of scholars will become higher and they will adopt more creative thinking which will surely lead to advancement. To conclude, having one global language spoken in every part of earth will be a healthy revolution. It will facilitate the ease of communication among people from various parts of countries having contradicting cultures and traditions. This will bring a wave of brotherhood which will in return result to peaceful society.
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in coming years. I
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a lot to bring
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fields of life will happen as more
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To conclude
, having one global
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spoken in every part of earth will be a healthy revolution. It will facilitate the
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of communication among
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from various parts of countries having contradicting cultures and traditions. This will bring a wave of brotherhood which will in return result to peaceful society.
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