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The bar graph compares the percentage of jobless woman in four countries of UK such as England Wales Scotland and Northern Ireland in 2013 and 2014.

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The bar graph compares the percentage of jobless woman in four countries of UK such as England Wales Scotland and Northern Ireland in 2013 and 2014. In an overview, it is clear that, the rate of unemployment is highest in 3 countries except Scotland in 2013. In 2013, England has the peak rate of 6. 8 % whereas, there was a slight decline of. 3 % in 2014. In contrast, wales was the lowest unemployment country in 2013 with the rate of 5. 4%. While northern Ireland has a slight increased rate of nearly0. 2 %. All these there countries showed a slight drop in unemployment rate of. 3%, . 4% and. 1% respectively. However, in Scotland, the rate of jobless woman was 6. 1 % and it rose about. 6% over a year. In conclusion, Scotland has considerably rose the number of woman who were out of job in 2014 from 2013.

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