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The bar graph compares the four-week study of the consumption of coffee and tea in five cities in Australia.

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The bar graph compares the four-week study of the consumption of coffee and tea in five cities in Australia. Overall, all locals in each city preferred to go to a cafe and have their selected beverage rather than just buying fresh or instant coffee. Getting freshly brewed coffee had the least percentage in all cities, accounting for around 40% in the cities of Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart while only a third in the cities of Brisbane, and Adelaide in the last four weeks. There were only a few percentage differences between the consumption of brewed coffee and instant coffee in the city of Sydney and Melbourne, however, a 15% gap is noticed in the other three cities. More than 60% of Sydneysiders, Melburnian, and Hobartians preferred to go to a cafe and have their preferred beverage in the last four weeks, while Brisbanite and Adelaideans were around half of its population, 55% and 50% respectively.
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, all locals in each city preferred to go to a
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cafe
and have their selected beverage
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had the least percentage in all
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, accounting for around 40% in the
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cities
of Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart while
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only
a third in the
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cities
of Brisbane, and Adelaide in the last four weeks. There were
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only
a few percentage differences between the consumption of brewed
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coffee
and instant
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coffee
in the city of Sydney and Melbourne,
however
, a 15% gap
is noticed
in the other three cities.

More than 60% of
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Sydneysiders
,
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Melburnian
, and
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Hobartians
preferred to go to a
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cafe
and have their preferred beverage in the last four weeks, while
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Brisbanite
and
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Adelaideans
were around half of its population, 55% and 50%
respectively
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