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The bar charts show the different methods used to travel to and from work in 1960,1980, and 2000.

The bar charts show the different methods used to travel to and from work in 1960, 1980, and 2000. aJ60P
The given chart depicts the various ways of transportation that would commute from workplaces which measured in terms of proportion in three distinctive spans: 1960, 1980, and 2000. Overall, it can be seen that the maximum percentage of bus users had observed at the beginning of the year, while the car owner recorded as the lowest percentage in the same year. To commence with, the bus had the highest percentage was an almost four-ten fold in 1960, while the car had the least percentage at just over 5% - a difference of 15%. Over the two decades, there was train transport had augmented at just above a quarter, more than 10 per cent of the car transportation in 1980. By 2000, the number of train users accounted for nearly 22%, which was smaller than cars (about 38%). Furthermore, the way of tube transportation witnessed at around one third, which was comparison higher the mode of the bus by 5%. Similarly, both modes of transportation of bus and car were highest out of others' year like 1980, 2000. Moreover, In the mode of the bus was abated at nearly 22% in 1980 and exactly 15% in 2000. However, the way of commute amenities had plummeted in 1908 at almost 23%, there was a considerable surge at one-fourth fold.
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that would commute from workplaces which measured in terms of proportion in three distinctive spans: 1960, 1980, and 2000.

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percentage
of bus users had observed at the beginning of the year, while the
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car
owner recorded as the lowest
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in the same year.

To commence with, the bus had the highest
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percentage
was an almost four-ten fold in 1960, while the
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car
had the least
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percentage
at
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over 5%
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a difference of 15%. Over the two decades, there was train transport had augmented at
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above a quarter, more than 10 per cent of the
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car
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transportation
in 1980. By 2000, the number of train users accounted for
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22%, which was smaller than
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cars
(about 38%).

Furthermore
, the way of tube
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transportation
witnessed at around one third, which was comparison higher the mode of the bus by 5%.
Similarly
, both modes of
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of bus and
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car
were highest out of others' year like 1980, 2000.
Moreover
, In the mode of the bus
was abated
at
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22% in 1980 and exactly 15% in 2000.
However
, the way of commute amenities had plummeted in 1908 at almost 23%, there was a considerable surge at one-fourth fold.
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IELTS academic The bar charts show the different methods used to travel to and from work in 1960, 1980, and 2000.

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