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The bar charts show education data related to young adults aged 15 years old in 10 different countries in 2015. The first chart shows in which countries adolescents do the most homework in terms of the hours per week. The second chart shows the nations that scored the best on an international science test. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts show education data related to young adults aged 15 years old in 10 different countries in 2015. The first chart shows in which countries adolescents do the most homework in terms of the hours per week. The second chart shows the nations that scored the best on an international science test. AJe8L
The first bar chart presents the education information about homework hours in a week of 15 years old students in 10 different countries in 2015 and the other bar chart illustrates the top international science scores of students in 10 nations. Overall, it is clear that Finish students spent the least hours on their assignments compared to the others. However, they got significantly the best scores on the international science test. Regarding the homework hours, Finland, South Korea, and Japan pupils approximately did Homework only 2. 8, 2. 9, and 4. 3, respectively. While Australian and US youngsters spent twice as much as South Korean children. Furthermore, Polish took three times more than Korean at 6. 5 hours which was lower than Irish students who spent their time on homework at 7. 2 hours. Surprisingly, Italian teenagers needed to face their work at 8. 6 hours. With respect to the top scores in the international science test, Finish apparently has the best scores even if they spent less hours doing the homework. In contrast, Italians who spent the most hours on homework did not even get the top scores. The second place was Hongkong - China, they received 543 points, followed by 6 nations who have no significant difference points.
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China, they received 543 points, followed by 6 nations who have no significant difference points.
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