Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The bar charts illustrate the data about what UK graduates and postgraduates did after leaving university in 2008.

The bar charts illustrate the data about what UK graduates and postgraduates did after leaving university in 2008. QwRAX
The bar charts illustrate the data about what UK graduates and postgraduates did after leaving university in 2008. Those who selected full-time jobs were ignored when the charts were prepared. Overall, what stands out from the bar charts is that a great number of new graduates tended to go back to colleges to carry on their education whereas plenty of fresh graduates opted for part-time work. Another interesting point is that the trend of both charts was the same although there were gorgeous differences dramatically. Looking at the details, as regards part-time work, 17735 numbers of students took a part-time job while far less number of postgraduates (2535) chose to take part in the part-time work sector. With respect to voluntary work, graduates being interested in voluntary work were much more than postgraduates being keen on voluntary work, 3500 for the former and 345 for the latter, respectively. As for the further study, there was a dramatic difference between number of graduates and postgraduates, 29665 for the former and 2725 for the latter. Additionally, number of graduates being into further education was an extremely more popular option than others. Regarding, unemployment, the bar charts reflecting the number of unemployed graduates provide moderately higher data (16235). On the other hand, others cater the number, 1625. Finally, it is noticeable that there were some options, further study and part-time work, far more popular among fresh graduates to opt for.
The bar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charts
illustrate the data about what UK
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graduates
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
postgraduates
did after leaving university in 2008. Those who selected full-time jobs were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignored
when the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charts
were prepared
.

Overall
, what stands out from the bar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charts
is that a great
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graduates
tended to go back to colleges to carry on their education whereas
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of fresh
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graduates
opted for part-time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
. Another interesting point is that the trend of both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charts
was the same although there were gorgeous differences
dramatically
. Looking at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
, as regards part-time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
, 17735
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
numbers
of students took a part-time job while far less
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
postgraduates
(2535) chose to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
in the part-time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
sector. With respect to voluntary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graduates
being interested
in voluntary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
were much more than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
postgraduates
being keen on voluntary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
, 3500 for the former and 345 for the latter,
respectively
. As for the
further
study, there was a dramatic difference between
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graduates
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
postgraduates
, 29665 for the former and 2725 for the latter.
Additionally
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graduates
being into
further
education was an
extremely
more popular option than others. Regarding, unemployment, the bar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charts
reflecting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of unemployed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graduates
provide
moderately
higher data (16235).
On the other hand
, others cater the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
, 1625.

Finally
, it is noticeable that there were
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
options,
further
study and part-time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
, far more popular among fresh
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
graduates
to opt for.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The bar charts illustrate the data about what UK graduates and postgraduates did after leaving university in 2008.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
237 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The bar charts illustrate the data about what UK graduates and postgraduates did after leaving university in 2008.