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The bar charts below show the world proportion of wage workers by income and gender and the percentage of businesses owned by women

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The bar charts highlights income of worker as well as there gender to show difference in income due to gender, further shows the business owned by women's in different countries with there proportion. This chart show wage workers in which there is dominance of male workers over female workers addition to it world have 25% of female workers while 38% of male workers then after in low income female are 8% and male are 18% further more in middle income female are 20% and male around 33% after that high income have most workers female are 45% while male are 55%. The bar chart represent businesses which are owned by women in all world is 35% then after in east asia and africa women own 48% of business in addition to it europe and central asia have low number of 32% further more latine america and Caribbean have more business owned by women 50% then after middle east and north africa has 22% south asia has 18% then after sub saharan africa has 38% and last but the highest women own businesses are in north America with 52%. thus bar charts show wage workers difference in income as well as in gender and the countries having minimum women businesses South Asia and maximum women businesses in north america.
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IELTS academic The bar charts below show the world proportion of wage workers by income and gender and the percentage of businesses owned by women

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