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The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015. QrGP
The provided bar graphs represent the information about male and female employment in three different countries in 2005 and 2015. It is obvious that in 2005 only 30% women employment in South Korea whereas in Sweden the highest rate on male in employment is approximately 79% in same year. We can observe that, in compared to 2005 employment rates, in 2015 it increased gradually in both categories. In 2005, 61% male and 35% women employment rate noted in Canada whereas in 2015 it increased by 70% and 53% respectively. In 2005, the percentages of working females is 30% and working male is 71% in South Korea but in 2015, it slightly increased in female category by 40%. In Sweden, 79% male and 45% female employment noted in 2005, and compared to 2005, in 2015 it slightly decreased in male section but gradually increased in female category.
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30% women
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in South Korea whereas in Sweden the highest rate on male in
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is approximately 79% in same year.

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rates, in 2015 it
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in both categories. In 2005, 61% male and 35% women
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rate noted in Canada whereas in 2015 it
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by 70% and 53%
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. In 2005, the percentages of working
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is 30% and working male is 71% in South Korea
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in 2015, it
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Sweden, 79% male and 45%
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IELTS academic The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.

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