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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. 8jPG
On the first map the city hospital is surrounded with ring road. There are 6 bus stops in front of the hospital, on hospital road. Also, there is a car park for staff and public on the east side of the bus stop. On the second map city hospital 2010, the city hospital is still surrounded with ring road but there are many other differences. First, there is still a car park on the east side but that car park changed to a staff only car park. And, a public car park was made on the east side of the hospital. Previously, there were 6 bus stops but instead of bus stops there are 2 new roundabouts, located on hospital road.
On the
first
map the city
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hospital
is surrounded
with ring
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road
. There are 6
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bus
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stops
in front of the
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hospital
, on
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hospital
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road
.
Also
, there is a
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car
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park
for staff and public on the east side of the bus
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stop
. On the second map city
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hospital
2010, the city
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hospital
is
still
surrounded with ring
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road
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but
there are
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many
other differences.
First
, there is
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a
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car
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park
on the east side
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but
that
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car
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park
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changed
to a staff
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only
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car
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park
. And, a public
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car
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park
was made
on the east side of the
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hospital
. Previously, there were 6 bus
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stops
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but
instead
of bus
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stops
there are 2 new roundabouts, located on
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hospital
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road
.

IELTS academic The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

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121 words
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