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The bar chart shows the percentage of small , medium, large companies which used social media for business purposes between 2012 to 2016

The bar chart shows the percentage of small, medium, large companies which used social media for business purposes between 2012 to 2016 X6MN
The bar chart illustrate the proportion of small, medium, large companies that maintained a presence on social media in a four year period starting from 2012. Overall, all of three types of companies witnessed a significant increase in the proportion of using social media over the given period. Also of note is that large companies are most users of social media throughout the period. Regarding small and medium business, starting at 28% in 2012, its proportion increase substaintially in 2014, at 35% beforing dropped to 30% in 2015. 2016 witnessed a significant increase in the percentage of small business that have social media presence. Similar changes, but to a greater extent, were seen in medium business, whose proportion of using social media for business purposes increase from 32% to 52% at the end of the span. Turning to large business, , its proportion almost always standing at just under 80% from 2012 to 2016. The sole exception to this was 2015, where the media participation rate fell to 54%.
The bar chart illustrate the
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, starting at 28% in 2012, its
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presence. Similar
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under 80% from 2012 to 2016. The sole exception to this was 2015, where the
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participation rate fell to 54%.
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the percentage of small, medium, large companies which used social media for business purposes between 2012 to 2016

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