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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. 1eYN
The chart demonstrate the ratio of UK's undergraduates at one university in England who were able to speak various languages along with English, in year 2000 and 2010. It can be clearly seen that, most of British students do not prefer to speak any other language in 2000 and 2010. 30% of students do not used any other language to communicate in 2000, while, the percentage dropped significantly to 30% in 2010. Similarly, 20% undergraduate used to speak Spanish language in 2000 but, the number decline slightly to 10%. Correspondingly, Number of French language users in 2000 was about 15% and plummeted to 10% in next ten years. There was a markedly growth from 10% to 15% in students who speak other two language in this decade. At the same time growth in another language speakers went up slightly from 15% to 20, Although, number of students who used to speak German remains plateaued in given period of time.
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that, most of British
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in 2000 and 2010.

30% of
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, the number decline
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users in 2000 was about 15% and plummeted to 10% in
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from 10% to 15% in
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other two
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in this decade. At the same time growth in another
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IELTS academic The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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