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The bar charts below show the percentage of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.

The bar charts below show the percentage of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015. 7grb
The given bar charts illustrate the proportion of working men and women in Canada, South Korea and Sweden in two different years (2005 and 2015). Overall, the number of employed men is significantly higher than that of employed women in all three countries in both years. Although Sweden had the highest number of both working men and women in 2005, it had been replaced by South Korea and Canada in 2015 respectively. In both years, men employment rates are higher than that of women which start from just above 60% as opposed to women employment rates that start from around 30%. In 2005, Sweden had almost 80% of working men compared to Canada and South Korea with around 60% and 75% respectively. However, South Korea became the country with the highest rate of male employees in 2015 with almost 80% as the male employee rate in Sweden fell down exactly to 70% in 10 years. With respect to women employment rate, although it had increased in all three nations, the most significant rise can be seen in Canada from under 40% to almost 55% in ten years duration. With almost 5% rise in common, South Korea and Sweden had around 35% and exactly 50% of women employment rates respectively in 2015.
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men
and
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women
in Canada, South Korea and Sweden in two
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different
years (2005 and 2015).

Overall
, the number of employed
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men
is
significantly
higher than that of employed
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women
in all three countries in both years. Although Sweden had the highest number of both working
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men
and
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in 2005, it had
been replaced
by South Korea and Canada in 2015
respectively
.

In both years,
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men
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employment
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rates
are higher than that of
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women
which
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start
from
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just
above 60% as opposed to
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women
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employment
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rates
that
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from around 30%. In 2005, Sweden had
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80% of working
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men
compared to Canada and South Korea with around 60% and 75%
respectively
.
However
, South Korea became the country with the highest
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rate
of male employees in 2015 with
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almost
80% as the male employee
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rate
in Sweden fell down exactly to 70% in 10 years.

With respect to
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women
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employment
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rate
, although it had increased in all three nations, the most significant rise can be
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seen
in Canada from under 40% to
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almost
55% in ten years duration. With
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5% rise in common, South Korea and Sweden had around 35% and exactly 50% of
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women
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employment
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rates
respectively
in 2015.
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IELTS academic The bar charts below show the percentage of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.

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