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The bar charts below show how often people in three age groups did various different evening activities in 1980 and 2010.

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The bar charts demonstrate how many time peopleof different ages spend on activities in 1980 and 2010. From the information provided by chart it is seen that people of all ages spend most of their time visiting families and friends in 1980. People over the age of 26 visited their families and friends more than 4 times per month. Older people enjoyed eating out while younger individuals liked watching movies in the cinema. They went to the cinema at least 2 times in a month. Meanwhile shopping wasn't as popular as other activities. But middle-aged people preferred it more than eating out or watching movies. People older than 26 went shopping more than 2 times per month. In 2010 sitiation changed a lot. Due to the growing popularity of the internet and social medias, people spend almost every time on it comparing to the 1980. However, they didn't stop visiting their relatives and friends, quite the opposite younger people started visiting their families and friends more often. Throughoute the years eating out and watching movies, as well as shopping became even more popular. Especially people between 15 and 25 visited these places more than 4 times per month. Overall, even though the popularity of internet became huge people of all ages still enjoy spending their time with their families and friends.
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IELTS academic The bar charts below show how often people in three age groups did various different evening activities in 1980 and 2010.

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