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The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. p8Va
The chart exhibits the percentage of regularity in physical activity between Australian men and women across various age groups in 2010. Overall, the percentage of Australian women was higher than men. Although the younger men were empirically more active than the women. Firstly, the age groups across 25 to 65 and over shows a higher percentage of female participation in physical activity. The differences in the percentages are quite evident with an exception to the age group 65 and over. For this age group the gap is only about 1%. The highest percentage of women is 53. 3% at the age group of 45-54. However, the percentage of male participation in physical activity is around 5% higher than the female participation among the younger population aged between 15 to 24. The lowest rate of men is found to be at the age of 35-44 years. The women in Australia were more active relative to men as they grew older in physical activity in 2010.
The chart exhibits the
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between Australian
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and
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across various
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in 2010.
Overall
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of Australian
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women
was higher than
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.
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the younger
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were
empirically
more active than the women.

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across 25 to 65 and over
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a higher
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of female participation in
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activity
. The differences in the
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are quite evident with an exception to the
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age
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group
65 and over. For this
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age
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the gap is
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about 1%. The highest
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of
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is 53. 3% at the
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age
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of 45-54.
However
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of male participation in
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physical
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activity
is around 5% higher than the female participation among the younger population aged
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is found
to be at the
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of 35-44 years.

The
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in Australia were more active relative to
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men
as they grew older in
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physical
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activity
in 2010.

IELTS academic The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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