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The bar chart shows the numbers of foreign visitors to Vietnam in the first half of 2019 and 2020.

The bar chart shows the numbers of foreign visitors to Vietnam in the first half of 2019 and 2020. 30nWw
The bar chart illustrates the number of visitors travelling to VIetNam during the first 6 months of 2019 and 2020. The most noticeable feature is that there is a large number of China visitors to VIetNam in 2019 whereas there are only 19 thousands Africa travelers who choose to come to VietNam. It is crystal clear that in the first 6 months in 2019, a lot of Chinese arrival to VietNam. On the contrary, this number fell significantly from 2. 1 million in the first 6 months of 2019 to 913 thousands visitors during the first 6 months of 2020. Approximately to China, Koreans traveled to VietNam during the first 6 months of 2019 but it plummeted in the next 6 months of 2020. Europeans seem to have a great interest in visiting VietNam when more than 1 million travellers visit VietNam in the first 6 month of 2019. However, this number of visitors decreased markedly to 665 thousands visitors throughout the first 6 months of 2020 On the other hand, Japan, Cambodia, America, Africa and Australia seem to have less interest in visiting VietNam. Australian and Japanese were mostly travelling to VietNam in 2019. The number of visitors to VietNam in
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