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The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. P1Wj
The bar chart illustrates from 2007 to 2012 how much visitors visited annually to three museums of London namely National Gallery, Victroia and Albert museum and British museum. The data is calibrated in millions. Overall, it is clearly seen that a decreasing trend was followed by a number of tourists in Victoria and Albert museums, whereas, other remaining categories followed an opposite trend. Noticeably, maximum people visited to victoria abd albert museum in initial three years, while, minimum numbers was accounted in last three years. To begin with, In 2007, the number of people paid visit to National gallery was least accounted for 6 millions and British museums, at about 12 millions. From 2008 to 2012, Visitors visited British museums remained stable with 6 millions but National gallery increased from 7 million to 8 millions visitors paid visit. National Gallery in 2012 was at highest peak visited by visitors with 16 millions and British museum was less then by 2 millions. Turning towards the remaining information, In 2007, Victoria and Albert was highest visited by people accounted for 13 millions after that it decreased till 2010, at 6 millions and rose upto 10 millions which was lowest in 2012.
The bar chart illustrates from 2007 to 2012 how
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visitors
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museums
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National
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,
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. The data
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museums
, whereas, other remaining categories followed an opposite trend.
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albert
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in initial three years, while, minimum numbers
was accounted
in last three years.

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National
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gallery
was least accounted for 6
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and British
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museums
, at about 12
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millions
. From 2008 to 2012,
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British
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remained stable with 6
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National
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increased from 7
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to 8
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paid visit.
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in 2012 was at highest peak
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with 16
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was less
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Turning towards the remaining information, In 2007, Victoria and Albert was highest
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accounted for 13
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after that it decreased till 2010, at 6
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which was lowest in 2012.
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