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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the number of children in two different age groups in an average class in different countries.

The bar graph illustrates the number of students on an average class at different ages (9 and 13) in different countries. It is clearly shown in the graph that Hong Kong and Japan had the most number of students at the age of 9; Hong Kong had 35 number of students per class at age 9 while Japan had moreover 31 number of students per class. However, Japan had an increase number of students to about 24 but the students in Hong Kong dropped at 31 students per class at the age 13. The United States and the Global Average had an equal number of 23 students per class at the age of 9 but fell by age 13. Russia, on the other hand got the lowest number of students both at age 9 and 13, having only 10 and 9 students per class accordingly. To summarise, at the age of 9 there were more students in Hong Kong but as the students reached the age of 13, most of the students were studied in Japan.
The bar graph illustrates the
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31
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However
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Japan
had an increase
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to about 24
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in Hong Kong dropped at 31
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13.

The United States and the Global Average had an equal
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9 and 13, having
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10 and 9
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in Hong Kong
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as the
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reached the
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age
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were studied
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Japan
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the number of children in two different age groups in an average class in different countries.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
176 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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