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The bar chart shows survey about Australian people's coffee and tea buying habits

The bar chart shows survey about Australian people's coffee and tea buying habits m2G3d
The bar chart illustrates views about percentages of residents buying various drinks while the last 4 weeks in 5 Australian cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, Hobart). Overall, in all cities most of the people went to cafes for coffee or tea, meanwhile, the lowest percentage of residents bought fresh coffees in that period. In 3 cities more than 60% of residents were in cafes for drinks, however, in the other 2 cities in Brisbane and Adelaide, it was not up from 55%. Almost in all cities' percentage of buying instant coffee was less than buying fresh coffee except for Adelaide, even so, it's percentage was upper than 45%. The lowest rate for going to cafes was in Adelaide, for instance, it was not up from 50% even. Brisbane saw the lowest rate in buying fresh coffee in the last 4 weeks just as Adelaide so too. To sum up, Residents went mostly for tea or coffee in all cities, in the same way, the lowest amount of residents bought fresh coffee and it was only around 35-45% in 5 cities.
The bar chart illustrates views about
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buying
various drinks while the last 4 weeks in 5 Australian
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cities
(Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, Hobart).

Overall
, in all
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cities
most of the
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people
went to
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cafes
for
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or tea, meanwhile, the
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lowest
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percentage
of
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residents
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bought
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fresh
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coffees
in that period.

In 3
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cities
more than 60% of
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residents
were in
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cafes
for drinks,
however
, in the other 2
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cities
in Brisbane and Adelaide, it was not up from 55%. Almost in all cities'
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of
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buying
instant
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coffee
was less than
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buying
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fresh
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coffee
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except for
Adelaide, even
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so
, it's
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percentage
was upper than 45%.

The
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lowest
rate for going to
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cafes
was in Adelaide,
for instance
, it was not up from 50% even. Brisbane
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lowest
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fresh
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coffee
in the last 4 weeks
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just
as Adelaide
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too.

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Residents
went
mostly
for tea or
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coffee
in all
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cities
,
in the same way
, the
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lowest
amount of
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residents
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bought
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fresh
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coffee
and it was
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only
around 35-45% in 5
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cities
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