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The bar chart shows how its popularity grew. From 1965 to 1985, the rise in the number of people who are overweight or obese was gradual. The first was recorded between 1985 and 1995, it was approximately 12%, which means that in 1985 it had just 50% on the contrary in 1995 it grew to 60%. And there was a second rapid surge, as well as the strongest increase from 1995 to 2015, it was around 20%, the percentage in 2015 is merely under 80%.

The bar chart shows how its popularity grew. From 1965 to 1985, the rise in the number of people who are overweight or obese was gradual. The first was recorded between 1985 and 1995, it was approximately 12%, which means that in 1985 it had just 50% on the contrary in 1995 it grew to 60%. And there was a second rapid surge, as well as the strongest increase from 1995 to 2015, it was around 20%, the percentage in 2015 is merely under 80%. VP5g3
The diagram demonstrates the percentage of adults who were overweight or obese in one country from 1965 to 2015, while the pie chart shows the proportion of adults who were overweight, obese, or severely obese in 2015. The main figure of diagram 1 is the proportion of adults who were overweight, obese, or severely obese in 2015 increased steadily from 1965 to 2015, while the Main trend of diagram 2 reveals that in 2015 the percentage of adults who are overweight and obese is extremely high. The bar chart shows how its popularity grew. From 1965 to 1985, the rise in the number of people who are overweight or obese was gradual. The first was recorded between 1985 and 1995, it was approximately 12%, which means that in 1985 it had just 50% on the contrary in 1995 it grew to 60%. And there was a second rapid surge, as well as the strongest increase from 1995 to 2015, it was around 20%, the percentage in 2015 is merely under 80%. In 2015, just around a third of individuals were healthy and underweight, according to the pie chart. Over 70% of adults were overweight, obese, or severely obese. The percentage of people who were dangerously fat and their health was seriously at risk, was 6%.
The diagram demonstrates the
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in 2015 increased
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows how its popularity grew. From 1965 to 1985, the rise in the number of people who are overweight or obese was gradual. The first was recorded between 1985 and 1995, it was approximately 12%, which means that in 1985 it had just 50% on the contrary in 1995 it grew to 60%. And there was a second rapid surge, as well as the strongest increase from 1995 to 2015, it was around 20%, the percentage in 2015 is merely under 80%.

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