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the bar chart shows cow emissions for different forms of transport in the European.

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The given bar chart reveals the information about the carbon dioxide is released by six different mode of transport ( passenger cars, buses, coaches, maritime, rail and air) in the European by per person in a KM. The data has been given in grams of CO2. Overall, it is clearly evident that, highest amount of CO2 is discharged bu air transport. whereas, coaches release the lowest amount of CO2. Firstly, it is evident that, approximately 345 grams of CO2 is released with air transport by per person A KM as followed by passengers cars in nearly 175 grams of CO2. Moreover, buses emission CO2 are just more than 50 grams per passenger. In contrast, coaches show the smallest emit CO2, which is nearly 50 grams. Whereas, maritimes and rails release exactly same amount of carbon dioxide which is 50 grams of carbon dioxide per passenger a KM for each.
The
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given
bar chart reveals the information about the carbon dioxide
is released
by six
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different
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mode
of transport
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(
passenger cars, buses, coaches, maritime, rail and air) in the European by per person in a KM. The data has been
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given
in
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grams
of CO2.

Overall
, it is
clearly
evident that,
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highest
amount of CO2
is discharged
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bu
air transport.
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whereas
, coaches release the lowest amount of CO2.

Firstly
, it is evident that, approximately 345
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grams
of CO2
is released
with air transport by per person A KM as followed by passengers cars in
nearly
175
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grams
of CO2.
Moreover
, buses emission CO2 are
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just
more than 50
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grams
per passenger.

In contrast
, coaches
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show
the smallest emit CO2, which is
nearly
50
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grams
. Whereas,
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maritimes
and rails release exactly same amount of carbon dioxide which is 50
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grams
of carbon dioxide per passenger a KM for each.
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