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what do you think about adults education and how the costs should be shared?

what do you think about adults education and how the costs should be shared? 56a8D

The charts demonstrate the output of a research on adult education. The bar chart shows the reasons why studying is necessary for adults, and the pie chart shows people’s opinion on how expenditures should be shared. The most notable reason for pursuing higher education among adults is whether or not they are interested in the subject. the second reason that should be considered while deciding to study is the fact that studying can help obtaining qualifications which later can be helpful in current job, which might result in getting promoted. There are some other reasons people might find fascinating while studying such as meeting new people and making friends, there might be some adults who actually enjoy studying or tend to study in order to change their profession. According to the pie chart, the cost of each course should be divided into three sections including taxpayers, individuals and employers. Most people believe that the largest proportion of money should be allocated to individuals (40 percent), and 35 percent of it must be used to pay for employers, and the rest of it (25 percent) should be used for taxpayers. In conclusion, these two charts show the information about people’s reason to study and how they think the cost should be shared between different sections. By far the most significant reason to study is interest in the subject, and the largest amount of adult’s education costs should be allocated to individuals.

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