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The bar chart show the Australian people to regular physical activity in age group..

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The bar chart illustrate the percentage of Australian male and female in different age groups who do regular exercise on the daily basis, in 2010. Percentage of both gender at different age groups as shown fluctuation in physical activity. As compare to man, woman tend to do more activity than man expect in the age group of 15 to 24. At the age of 15 to 24, 52. 8% of male excercise which as highest percentage as compared to the other age groups. There is a slightly decrease (13. 3%) amount of man do excercise regular in between 25 to 44 age group. As seen light growth in 45 to 54 age and also increase (45. 1%) the 55 to 64 age. Age group of 65 and above show 46. 7% of male do regular body activity. At the age of 15 to 24, women tend to do less regular exercise compared to man. Women at age of 25 to 34 group physical activity as increase up to 1. 2% in this stage. More than 50% of female do body activity which is more than 13% as compared to male gender. Age between 45 to 53, 53. 3% of women do excercise which is highest among other groups. There we can see slightly decrease in women excercise at the age of 55 to 64. At age of 65 and above women tend to less body Excerise.
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