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the bar chart show the amount of snowfall at three Canadian ski resorts

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of snowfall at three ski resorts, namely Viking Moutain, Snowbury, and Power Peak in Canada between November and December. Overall, the amount of snowfall in Viking mountain and Snowbury increase over the period shown. While Power Peak shows a steady decline in its figures. As can be seen from the chart, in Viking mountain, the snowfall accounts for the lowest with over 8 centimetres in November then go up minimally around 12 centimetres in December. The proportion of snowfall in Snowbury in November is two times higher than that of Viking mountain, at around 18 centimetres, and hit the highest of snowfall in December. In contrast to Powder Peak, the snowfall lead the way with over 38 centimetres in November, however, a two-month period witnesses a decrease of 20 centimetres in the amount of snowfall.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
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at three ski resorts,
namely
Viking
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Moutain
,
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Snowbury
, and Power Peak in Canada between November and December.

Overall
, the amount of
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snowfall
in Viking mountain and
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Snowbury
increase over the period shown.
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While
Power Peak
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shows
a steady decline in its figures.

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seen
from the chart, in Viking mountain, the
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accounts for the lowest with over 8
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centimetres
in November then go up
minimally
around 12
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centimetres
in December. The proportion of
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snowfall
in
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Snowbury
in November is two times higher than that of Viking mountain, at around 18
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centimetres
, and hit the highest of
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snowfall
in December.

In contrast
to Powder Peak, the
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lead the way with over 38
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centimetres
in November,
however
, a two-month period witnesses a decrease of 20
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centimetres
in the amount of
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snowfall
.
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IELTS academic the bar chart show the amount of snowfall at three Canadian ski resorts

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