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The bar chart provides us an opportunity to observe the information on games software, CDs, and DVDs or Video sales worldwide in the year 2000 - 2003.

The bar chart provides us an opportunity to observe the information on games software, CDs, and DVDs or Video sales worldwide in the year 2000 - 2003. YaJr

The bar chart provides us an opportunity to observe the information on games software, CDs, and DVDs or Video sales worldwide in the year 2000 - 2003. From the beginning of the 21-century era, Cds were the highest profitable products which numerously sold at the value of 35 billion dollars. Since then, it slightly dipped down and lost 5 billion of advantages in 2003. Differently from the previously mentioned data, DVDs or Videos have been grown up from approximately 20 billion at the starting point of the century. It is continuously developing selling values and has archived 30 billion by 2003. The similarity of developing numbers appeared to games software. It started its profit at 15 billion dollars at the beginning and cultivated the value to almost 20 billion in 2003.

The bar chart provides us an opportunity to observe the information on games software, CDs, and DVDs or Video sales worldwide in the year Consider using an n-dash (half dash), if you want to indicate numerical ranges or time ranges.2000 – 20032000–2003
2000 - 2003
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billion
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billion
 of advantages in 2003. Differently
 from the previously mentioned data, DVDs or Videos have been grown
 up from approximately 20 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
billion
 at the starting point of the century. It is continuously
 developing selling values and has archived 30 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
billion
 by 2003.

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started
 its profit at 15 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
billion
 dollars at the beginning and cultivated the value to almost 20 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
billion
 in 2003. 