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The bar chart illustrates the value of export earnings in five categories and the table shows the percentage of changes in value during 2015 and 2016.

The bar chart illustrates the value of export earnings in five categories and the table shows the percentage of changes in value during 2015 and 2016. b0MX
The bar chart illustrates the value of export earnings in five categories and the table shows the percentage of changes in value during 2015 and 2016. In general, what stands out from the graphs is that there was an increasing trend in the value of petroleum products, engineered goods, agricultural products and textiles, while that of germs and jewellery saw a decrease. Also, petroleum products take up the largest part in export earnings and that of the textiles accounts for the least. According to the pie chart, we can find that petroleum products and engineered goods were the most important part of the total export earnings, with changes of 3% and 8. 5% respectively. However, there was greatest change in the value of export earnings for textiles, with 15. 24 percentage, almost twice that of the second largest— engineered goods, more than five times of that of the petroleum products. The value of export earnings of agricultural products remained almost stable at 32 billion dollar, with only 0. 81% increase. In contrast, the value of germs and jewellery exporting dropped to approximately 41 billion dollar, with a 5. 18% decreasing. This element takes up nearly one fifth of the total export earnings.
The bar chart illustrates the
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earnings
in five categories and the table
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shows
the percentage of
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changes
in
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value
during 2015 and 2016.

In general
, what stands out from the graphs is that there was an increasing trend in the
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value
of
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petroleum
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products
, engineered
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goods
, agricultural
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products
and textiles, while that of germs and
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jewellery
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saw
a decrease.
Also
,
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petroleum
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take up the largest part in
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export
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earnings
and that of the textiles accounts for the least.

According to the pie chart, we can find that
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petroleum
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products
and engineered
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goods
were the most
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important
part of the total
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export
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earnings
, with
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of 3% and 8. 5%
respectively
.
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, there was
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change
in the
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of
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export
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earnings
for textiles, with 15. 24 percentage, almost twice that of the second largest— engineered
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goods
, more than five times of that of the
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petroleum
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products
. The
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value
of
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export
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earnings
of agricultural
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products
remained almost stable at 32 billion
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dollar
, with
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only
0. 81% increase.

In contrast
, the
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value
of germs and
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jewellery
exporting dropped to approximately 41 billion
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dollar
, with a 5. 18% decreasing. This element takes up
nearly
one fifth of the total
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export
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the value of export earnings in five categories and the table shows the percentage of changes in value during 2015 and 2016.

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