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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of income for a Hollywood film studio from three film genres, namely romance, comedies, and action/horror from 1970 to 2000.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of income for a Hollywood film studio from three film genres, namely romance, comedies, and action/horror from 1970 to 2000. VwV5O
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of income for a Hollywood film studio from three film genres, namely romance, comedies, and action/horror from 1970 to 2000. Overall, the revenue of romance movies witnessed a remarkable downward trend, while that of action/horror movies considerably increased from 1970 to 2000. Also, comedies movies had a slight downward fluctuation during the period. In 2000, action and horror movies accounted for the highest proportion of income. As can be seen in the graph, in 1970, romance movies made up over 50% of the income, which was the highest figure of the period. However, it experienced a gradual decrease to roughly 40% in 1980. Significantly, the percentage suddenly plummeted to merely 15% in 1990 and ended up with lower than 10% in 2000. By contrast, the figure for action and horror movies commenced with merely 10% in 1970 and rose gradually to 15% and 18% in 1980 and 1990, respectively. Remarkably, in 2000, the figure surged double, to 37% in 2000. Furthermore, the income of comedies accounted for 33% in 1970 before reaching the peak at 36% in 1980. In the next two decades, the revenue of this genre decreased slightly to 31% and 30%, in turn.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of income for a Hollywood film studio from three film genres,
namely
romance, comedies, and action/horror from 1970 to 2000.
Overall
, the revenue of romance
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movies
witnessed a remarkable downward trend, while that of action/horror
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movies
considerably
increased from 1970 to 2000.
Also
, comedies
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movies
had a slight downward fluctuation during the period. In 2000, action and horror
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movies
accounted for the highest proportion of income.

As can be
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seen
in the graph, in 1970, romance
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movies
made up over 50% of the income, which was the highest figure of the period.
However
, it experienced a gradual decrease to roughly 40% in 1980.
Significantly
, the percentage
suddenly
plummeted to
merely
15% in 1990 and ended up with lower than 10% in 2000.

By contrast, the figure for action and horror
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movies
commenced with
merely
10% in 1970 and rose
gradually
to 15% and 18% in 1980 and 1990,
respectively
.
Remarkably
, in 2000, the figure surged double, to 37% in 2000.

Furthermore
, the income of comedies accounted for 33% in 1970
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before
reaching the peak at 36% in 1980. In the
next
two decades, the revenue of this genre decreased
slightly
to 31% and 30%, in turn.

IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the percentage of income for a Hollywood film studio from three film genres, namely romance, comedies, and action/horror from 1970 to 2000.

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