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The bar chart illustrates the overall number of Olympic medals in three types, gold, silver and bronze, which are won by twelve different countries. The number of information will be presented in the following paragraphs. It is apparent, that the USA has a significant number of prizes with about 2, 300 medals, the highest prize that they get is gold, silver and bronze, in order. The second highest score is responsible for the Soviet Union, where the prizes almost reach half of the USA, these are shared almost equally in three medals. However, in other countries that have not gotten a lot of medals, in the UK, France Germany and Italy are won just above 500 prizes. Furthermore, for the rest of the counties, they just won less than one-fourth of the USA.
The bar chart illustrates the
overall
number of Olympic medals in three types, gold, silver and bronze, which
are won
by twelve
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different
countries. The number of information will
be presented
in the following paragraphs.

It is apparent, that the USA has a significant number of
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prizes
with about 2, 300 medals, the highest
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prize
that they
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get
is gold, silver and bronze, in order. The second highest score is responsible for the Soviet Union, where the
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prizes
almost reach half of the USA, these
are shared
almost
equally
in three medals.

However
, in other countries that have not gotten
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a lot of
medals, in the UK, France Germany and Italy
are won
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just
above 500
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prizes
.
Furthermore
, for the rest of the counties, they
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just
won less than one-fourth of the USA.

IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the overall

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
133 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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