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The bar chart illustrates the number of hours spent watching television by men and women from seven different age groups in the United Kingdom over a five-year period from 1995 to 1999.

The bar chart illustrates the number of hours spent watching television by men and women from seven different age groups in the United Kingdom over a five-year period from 1995 to 1999. obW1w
Generally speaking, both sexes watched TV more as they got older, whereas females usually spent more time watching TV with the notable exception of the 4- to 15-year-old age group. More specifically, both genders from the four to fifteen age group watched television approximately 16 hours per week, while the oldest age group (65&over) spent slightly over 35 hours watching television, a difference of 19 hours. 16-to-64-year-old women used their time watching TV more than men did. The amount of time spent watching TV by males and females from 45 to 65&over age groups increased over this time period except 65-and-over-year-old women. One interesting point to note is that the figures for both genders from the 65&over age group were the same in 1999.
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watching TV with the notable exception of the 4- to 15-year-
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television approximately 16 hours per week, while the oldest
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(65&over)
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35 hours watching television, a difference of 19 hours. 16-to-64-year-
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women
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spent watching TV by males and females from 45 to
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period except 65-and-over-year-
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women. One interesting point to note is that the figures for both genders from the
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were the same in 1999.
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the number of hours spent watching television by men and women from seven different age groups in the United Kingdom over a five-year period from 1995 to 1999.

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