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The bar chart illustrates the honeymoon places which are considered as top choices for 5000 newlywed English couples in 2010

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The bar chart illustrates the honeymoon places which are considered as top choices for 5000 newlywed English couples in 2010 In generall, Thai Land and Bali were chosen as the first and second places in this list, whereas, The Lake district is the least popular destination for honeymoon among 5000 couples. Thailand was the number-one destination, with 1410 couples choosing this, just ahead of Bali, which was selected by 1335 couples. Coasta Rica was ranked third with 750 couples, which was approximately half as popular as Bali. 600 British couples wanted to come to The Maldives for honeymoon, making it slightly popular than The Greak Islands, at 432 selections. Paris was next choice, with 209 British couples, although this was much less popular than The Greek Islands. The second least popular is Spain, when this destination was chosen by only 140 newlywed couples, which was one-tenth as common as the most one –Thailand. The bottom of this list was The Lake district, with 124 participants choosing it, slightly less prevalent than Spain.
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less prevalent than Spain.
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