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The bar chart illustrates information about the amount of Men and Women gym members in Thailand from 1985 to 2015

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The bar chart illustrates information about the amount of Men and Women gym members in Thailand from 1985 to 2015. ovell, the number of men going to the gym is more than the number of women in a period of time from 1985 to 2015. In addition, this number also fluctuates up and down over the years. In the early years the number of men and women going to the gym increased evenly. However, the number of men going to the gym is more than women in the same period, but not significantly. Initially, the number of males was around 2000 and females per 1000. Just 5 years later, the number of males and females has increased significantly, with a gap of nearly 4000 people, and nearly 2000 people respectively, double the number of people in the period. prior to. During the period 1995-2000, the proportion of men going to the gym tended to decrease from about 3000 to less than 2000, while that of women tended to increase from less than 2000 to more than 3000. During the next period from 2005 to 2010, the number of people going to gyms for both men and women continued to increase. While women only increased slightly, men increased rapidly from 2000 people in 2005 and peaked in 2010 with 5000 people. At the end of the period, the percentage of men going to the gym suddenly decreased by 5 times compared to 2010. And women decreased but at a moderate rate, only about 1000 people compared to the previous year.
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members in Thailand from 1985 to 2015.

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is more than the
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of time from 1985 to 2015.
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fluctuates up and down over the years.

In the early years the
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and
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going to the
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increased
evenly
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of males was around 2000 and females per 1000.
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1995-2000, the proportion of
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tended to decrease from about 3000 to less than 2000, while that of
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tended to increase from less than 2000 to more than 3000.

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from 2005 to 2010, the
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in 2005 and peaked in 2010 with 5000
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decreased
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compared to the previous year.
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