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The bar chart illustrates information about the amount of leisure time enjoyed by sex and different employment status between 1998 to 1999.

The bar chart illustrates information about the amount of leisure time enjoyed by sex and different employment status between 1998 to 1999. keJ9W
The bar chart illustrates information about the amount of leisure time enjoyed by sex and different employment status between 1998 to 1999. It can be seen from the chart full-time males employee and females employee had enjoyed about 50 hours and 38 hours of leisure time respectively. Employed part-time men did not spend time on leisure activity. However, on the other side employed part-time women had spend 45 hours on leisure activities. Approximately 82 hours of leisure time had been enjoyed by unemployed males on the other side unemployed females had enjoyed 79 hours. The same graph pattern shown in retired males and females. Where males and females had enjoyed 82 and 79 hours respectively. The amount of leisure time spend by housewives females had 58 hours. All in all, it is clearly seen from the graph unemployed and retired men and women was enjoying more leisure time. On the other side part-time male employee and housewives males had not enjoy free time.
The bar chart illustrates information about the amount of
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leisure
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time
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enjoyed
by sex and
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different


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employment
status
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between 1998 to 1999
.

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seen
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males
employee and
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females
employee had
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enjoyed
about 50

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hours
and 38
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hours
of
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leisure
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time
respectively
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men
did not spend
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time
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on


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leisure
activity.
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, on the other side employed part-time women had
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spend
45
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hours
on

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leisure
activities.

Approximately 82
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of
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leisure
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time
had been
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enjoyed
by unemployed
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males
on the other side

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unemployed
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females
had
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enjoyed
79
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hours
. The same graph pattern shown in retired
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males
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and


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females
. Where
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males
and
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females
had
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enjoyed
82 and 79
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hours
respectively
. The amount of
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leisure


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time
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spend
by housewives
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females
had 58 hours.

All in all, it is
clearly
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seen
from the graph unemployed and retired
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men
and women was enjoying

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more
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leisure
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time
. On the other side part-time male employee and housewives
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males
had not
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enjoy


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free
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time
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates information about the amount of leisure time enjoyed by sex and different employment status between 1998 to 1999.

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13 paragraphs
163 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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