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The bar chart graduates and postgraduate learner who did never go into full time work .

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The bar charts, illustrate the UK graduate and postgraduate learner who did never go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008. The data had calibrated in numbers. Overall, it is clear that, highest number of graduates students during the further study excluding work. While lowest number was observed in voluntary work in year 2008. Moving to detail, In 2008 destination of UK graduates brought full _ time work. Firstly, part _ time employer was approximately 16, 000 student. In the next stage of voluntary work was rapidly decline of student work after complete graduates was nearly 3, 500. The further study is more sharply rather than unemployment cases around 29, 665. To Being further, postgraduates youngsters in part _ time work is comparatively high rather than graduates. The further study and unemployment of postgraduates youth full _ time work that was 2, 225and 1, 625 respectively.
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did after leaving college in 2008. The data had calibrated in numbers.
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in year 2008. Moving to detail, In 2008 destination of UK
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employer was approximately 16, 000
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