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the bar chart from task 1

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The bar chart illustrates the how many hours adolescents in Chester spent on seven activities each weak between seven years from 2002 to 2007. Overall, the chart shows that the highest time of teenagers spent for watching television while the lowest one was for bowling during all these seven years. Furthermore, watching television, going to pubs/discos, and shopping increased steadily between these seven years while doing homework and sport significantly decreased.
The bar chart illustrates
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many
hours adolescents in Chester spent on seven activities each weak between seven years from 2002 to 2007.

Overall
, the chart
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shows
that the highest time of
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teenagers
spent for watching television while the lowest one was for bowling during all these seven years.
Furthermore
, watching television, going to pubs/discos, and shopping increased
steadily
between these seven years while doing homework and sport
significantly
decreased.
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2 paragraphs
71 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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