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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Qr0x
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the Australian the male and female population participating in some form of physical activity on a regular basis in 2010. The data is divided into 6 age groups, ranging from 15 to 65 years old and over. The main points of interest are that in the youngest age group (15-24) more men than women take part in regular physical activity. However, this then changes and women do more physical activity than men from 25 to 65, at which point both men and women do almost the same amount of physical activity. Overall, the proportion of men involved in physical activity decreases between the ages of 24 and 44 and then begins to increase again. In the case of women, the trend is reversed, somewhat, with younger women being involved in less physical activity and doing more physical activity between the ages of 25 and 64, before returning to virtually the same level of physical activity as the youngest age group (15-24).
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the Australian the male and female population participating in
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on a regular basis in 2010. The data
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age
groups, ranging from 15 to 65 years
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women
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take part
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physical
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activity
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women
do more
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physical
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activity
than
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men
from 25 to 65, at which point both
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men
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do almost the same amount of
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activity.

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, the proportion of
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men
involved in
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physical
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activity
decreases between the
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ages
of 24 and 44 and then
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begins
to increase again. In the case of
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women
, the trend
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, somewhat, with younger
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women
being involved
in less
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physical
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activity
and doing more
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physical
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activity
between the
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ages
of 25 and 64,
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before
returning to
virtually
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physical
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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3 paragraphs
168 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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