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The bar chart depicts how the 4 age groups to get daily news by media in 2011.

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The bar chart depicts how the 4 age groups receive daily news by media in 2011. Overall, radio is the most popular form to get news in most age groups. However, teenagers and people in the 18 to 29 age group also tend to update information by social networking. The rate of 18-29 year-old-people using radio to catch up on news was highest amongst the other age brackets, standing at 92% in 2011. Meanwhile, the rates of radio listeners who fell into the 30-49, 50-64 and over 65 age groups were almost equal, fluctuated from 80-90%. By contrast, only 40% of residents who are between 10 to 17 years old. While the rate of people aged 18 to 29 who read microblog was at 22%, the other age groups held less than 20%. 10-17-year-old people and adolescents from 18-29 accessing social networking both accounted for 80% population in 2011. At the same time, 50% of residents who belonged to the 30-49 age group chose to update daily information via social networking. Besides, this figure of people between 50 to 64 and over 65 were significantly lower, at 40% and 25% respectively.
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using radio to catch up on news was highest amongst the other
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brackets, standing at 92% in 2011. Meanwhile, the rates of radio listeners
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fell into the 30-49, 50-64 and over 65
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were almost equal, fluctuated from 80-90%. By contrast,
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held less than 20%.

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and adolescents from 18-29 accessing social networking both accounted for 80% population in 2011. At the same time, 50% of residents
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chose to update daily information via social networking.
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