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The bar chart compares the post-school qualification in Australia for the year 1999, broken down by gender

The bar chart compares the post-school qualification in Australia for the year 1999, broken down by gender 6L3Gr
The bar chart compares the post-school qualification in Australia for the year 1999, broken down by gender. It is also noticeable that more male achieved their post-school degrees in skilled vocational diploma, postgraduate diploma and master's degree than female did, whereas more female attended undergraduate diploma and bachelor's degree. In 1999, the highest of male percentage was recorded in skilled vocational diploma (90%), which was much higher than that of females ( only 10%). While the highest proportion of women in undergraduate diploma, with 70%, which was double compared to that of males. Likewise, more women had a bachelor's degree than males, with 53% and 46%, respectively. In term of the postgraduate diploma and master's degree, male were more predominating than females in the percentage with more 70% for men, 30% for women and 60% for men, 40% for females
The bar chart compares the post-school qualification in Australia for the year 1999, broken down by gender. It is
also
noticeable that more male achieved their post-school
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degrees
in skilled vocational
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diploma
, postgraduate
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diploma
and master's
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degree
than
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female
did, whereas more
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female
attended undergraduate
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diploma
and bachelor's
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degree
. In 1999, the highest of male percentage
was recorded
in skilled vocational
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diploma
(90%), which was much higher than that of
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females
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only
10%). While the highest proportion of women in undergraduate
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diploma
, with 70%, which was double compared to that of
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males
.
Likewise
, more women had a bachelor's
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degree
than
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males
, with 53% and 46%,
respectively
.

In term of the postgraduate
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diploma
and master's
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degree
, male were more predominating than
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females
in the percentage with more 70% for
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men
, 30% for women and 60% for
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men
, 40% for
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females
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IELTS academic The bar chart compares the post-school qualification in Australia for the year 1999, broken down by gender

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