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The bar chart compares the amounts of money invested in bonds and stocks in terms of billion dollars

The bar chart compares the amounts of money invested in bonds and stocks in terms of billion dollars Gego

The bar chart compares the amounts of money invested in bonds and stocks in terms of billion dollars from 2001 up to 2006. It can be obviously seen that investing in stocks was higher than bonds in all years. As regards with the money invested in stock market, it can be deduced that, the inflow of liquidity into the market increased every year. And the people preferred to invest their money in stock than bonds. In addition, last years had most high investment of each year in both of stock and bond: 311 and 188 in 2006 respectively. And for the 2001, it had lowest investment in stock and bond. Although the investment in bond gently went up, investment in stocks it was faster than it which causes more difference between the inflow of liquidity into the stock and bond during the period. To sum up, the both of them were upward and the stock became more valued and popular for investment for the people which invested in stock markets from 2001 to 2006.

The bar chart compares the amounts of money invested in bonds and stocks in terms of billion dollars from 2001 up to 2006. It can be obviously
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seen
 that investing in stocks was higher than bonds in all years.

As regards with the money invested in stock market, it can be deduced
 that, the inflow of liquidity into the market increased every year. And the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 preferred to invest their money in stock than bonds. In addition
, last years had most high You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasefinancingtransactionfinancegrantmoney
investment
 of each year in both of stock and bond: 311 and 188 in 2006 respectively
. And for the 2001, it had A determiner is probably missing here: "the lowest".the lowest
lowest
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investment
 in stock and bond. Although the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasefinancingtransactionfinancegrantmoney
investment
 in bond gently
 went up, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasefinancingtransactionfinancegrantmoney
investment
 in stocks it was faster than it which causes more difference between the inflow of liquidity into the stock and bond during the period.

To sum up, the both of them were upward and the stock became more valued and popular for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasefinancingtransactionfinancegrantmoney
investment
 for the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 which invested in stock markets from 2001 to 2006. 