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The bar chart compares the amount of money (in millions of euros) that people in four different age groups from Paris, France, spent on going to the cinema, restaurants and music concerts in 2019.

The bar chart compares the amount of money (in millions of euros) that people in four different age groups from Paris, France, spent on going to the cinema, restaurants and music concerts in 2019. 953Kn
This figure shows the amount of money that Paris's people spend on their hobit in four different stage of ages. the youngest group spent most of their money in music concerts which nearly 15 millions. the second group which represent for 30's people have chosen restaurants to be the most thing that they put their money. the middle-age group whose range from 40 to 55 made a huge different with their money they put in restaurant compares with the others two and also with others group. and final group with elder people also spent a lot in restaurant. the spending structure stay the same as middle-age group but much lower in amount of money
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spent most of their
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in music concerts which
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which represent for
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have chosen restaurants to be the most thing that they put their money.

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whose range from 40 to 55 made a huge
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with their
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they put in restaurant compares with the others two and
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with others group.

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and
final
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with elder
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also
spent a lot in restaurant.
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