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the bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014

The bar chart describes the manufacture and usage of electricity in 2014 from tenth countries. Furthermore, the scale of the manufacure and usage in 2014 is greatly competitive. Instrestingly, germany is the only country with higher consumed than the production. As it show, China was the first place for most produced and used elctricity in 2014, producing higher than 5, 000 kWh and using almost the same amount. The second place falls to United States with almost a quarter less amount generated and consumed electricity than china. The other top 5 (Russia, Japan, India), drain and produced almost a third less than United States. Afterward, the sixth and seventh place goes to canada and france, amount of manufactured and usaged up to 600 below 500 bilion kWh. In eighth place, brazil with almost the same as france. Apparently, for germany as the ninth place, the consumption is almost 70 bilion kWh higher than the generator. Finally, south korea for the produced and usaged for electricity in 2014, below 500 bilion kWh.
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elctricity in 2014, producing higher than 5, 000 kWh and using
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the same amount. The second
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a quarter less amount generated and consumed electricity than china. The other top 5 (Russia, Japan, India), drain and produced
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a third less than United States.

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goes to canada and france, amount of manufactured and usaged up to 600 below 500 bilion kWh. In eighth
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, brazil with
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the same as france.
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70 bilion kWh higher than the generator.
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, south korea for the produced and usaged for electricity in 2014, below 500 bilion kWh.

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