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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The given bar chart bring us into knowledge, how many people of Australia was performing constant exercise in the year 2010. It is clear from the graph, in the given age group 35 to 44, the number of men doing exercise daily was bottomed out at 39. 5%, whereas all other age group in male significantly more number than that of age group 35 to 44, while the age group of 15 to 24 and 65 to over has been least in female category. During the next three age group, male category showed a steady fall, and then the next three age group male category seems a steady rise and reached at 46. 7%. As compare to male, female shown up and down in graph. In group of 65 and over, male and female surprisingly had to the almost same number of regularization in exercise at round 46% while, also in only female age group of 35 to 44 and 45 to 54 had to the almost same number of regularization in exercise at round 52 to 53%. From the given data, we cam observe that, female are more consistent than male. male having lots of ups and downs in discipline.

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