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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. 9M77
The bar chart shows the number of men and women who did physical activity in their respective age groups in 2010. Overally more females in the different age groups had a greater percentage as compared to males. Women aged between 45 to 54 had the greatest percentage of 53. 3 as compared to men who only had 43. 1. Men aged between 15 to 24 had the greatest percentage of physical activity of 52. 8 with the women in the category taking up 47, 7.
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the number of
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and women who did physical activity in their respective age groups in 2010.

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more females in the
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age groups had a greater percentage as compared to males. Women aged
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 45 and 54".
between 45 to 54
had the greatest percentage of 53. 3 as compared to
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who
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had 43. 1.
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aged
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 15 and 24".
between 15 to 24
had the greatest percentage of physical activity of 52. 8 with the women in the category taking up 47, 7.

IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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